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I'm not sure how interesting this will be, but I kept a few deleted and heavily revised scenes while I was writing Left My Heart. I thought I'd post them here, for the hell of it, along with a note about why it was deleted. Please note that there are spoilers here for LMH, in case you haven't read it!



This scene would have taken place the first evening that Draco took Harry clubbing, close to the beginning of the fic. This was the night they'd first meet up with Colby and Jeremy. I had planned to do more with the tattoo, and to use it as a hint that Manny was a wizard. Harry was going to see him playing with it, which would imply not only that Manny was a wizard, but also that Malfoy trusted him. Catching the dragon was going to be a metaphor for gaining Malfoy's trust. Yeah, I know: stupid idea!

In the end, I decided to do something else in that particular scene, so I cut it. That became the scene where Malfoy dressed Harry to go out, which I liked better. I ended up not using the tattoo bit at all, because I wanted Manny's identity to remain a secret from Harry (and hence, the readers) for as long as possible. Out of context, it's kind of cute, though!

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Deleted Scene #1

Malfoy took a shower and then walked around the apartment naked for a good ten minutes, much to Harry's discomfort. Dressed and ready to go, Harry sat on the bed and waited, trying not to look, but looking just the same. Malfoy was more wiry than skinny, Harry noticed, and he had a tattoo of a celtic knot at the base of his spine. Harry watched the tattoo each time Malfoy walked by, and wondered if it had hurt. Malfoy was searching for something in his closet when Harry realized that the tattoo had morphed into a small dragon. He looked closer, and the dragon stretched its wings and yawned. Harry gasped, then immediately blushed when Malfoy's head snapped around.

"I... your tattoo... surprised me," he stammered, feeling himself turn red. Malfoy grinned and walked closer, turning so that Harry could have a closer look.

"Touch it," he said.

"Sorry?" Harry felt his cheeks flame even further.

"Go ahead," Malfoy laughed, glancing over his shoulder.

Harry swallowed and tentatively pressed one finger to the dragon. It skittered out of his reach, glaring at him with its beady black eyes. "What the...?" Harry tried to touch it again, and it moved away, shaking its head at him. Harry watched it dance across Malfoy's pale skin, dodging his attempts to catch it. He pressed the flat of his hand against Malfoy's skin, effectively trapping the dragon.

He smiled, and then he realized his hand was on Malfoy's ass. He froze for a moment, uncertain whether he should jerk it away or simply make a casual remark about the magical tattoo, as if there was nothing weird about having been fondling another man's ass for the last minute.

Malfoy cleared his throat and smiled over his shoulder. "Cute trick, isn't it?"

Harry stared up at him and let his hand fall away. "Do you show that to all the boys?"

Malfoy grinned. "It only moves for wizards, you know. It looks like a celtic knot, unless you look very hard."

Harry blushed, realizing he'd been caught. Malfoy proceeded to get dressed, much to Harry's relief.

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Date: 2004-06-14 09:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] notoccamy.livejournal.com
Cute! Show us some more! *grins*

Date: 2004-06-15 08:48 pm (UTC)

Date: 2004-06-14 09:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lady-suzuran.livejournal.com
Nice deleted scene, almost makes me wish it had passed the final cut. :D

Date: 2004-06-15 08:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
I thought it was cute, but the whole tattoo thing just didn't fit the story, in the end. It was completely superfluous. Of course, that didn't stop me from keeping in other superfluous scenes, but... *grins*

Thanks!

Date: 2004-06-14 09:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] homicial-nny.livejournal.com
AWW!! That's adorable! I've seen the living tattoo idea used in other fanfics, but this is definitely the cutest.

No, nothing weird at all about Harry fondling Draco's rear. *grin*

Date: 2004-06-15 08:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
I'm sure I've seen the living tattoo somewhere else before, but I have no idea where. That's actually one of those weird fanon things where you aren't sure if you need to credit it to someone else, or if it's just fanon enough that you use it without worrying about pissing someone off. ;-)

Date: 2004-06-14 09:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lagreyeyes.livejournal.com
Oh, show us more, please!! ;)

Date: 2004-06-15 08:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! More to come. Like the icon, BTW.

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Date: 2004-06-14 09:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] breila-rose.livejournal.com
oo so cute!

Show us more!!

Date: 2004-06-15 08:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! Is that Lindsay Lohan in your icon?

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Date: 2004-06-14 09:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mafan.livejournal.com
It really would have been great to see this scene in the final cut. Hehe, Harry's hand on Draco's ass. Yow-ZA! More please!

Date: 2004-06-15 08:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
It just seemed superfluous, unfortunately. There's no reason to introduce something like a magical tattoo unless you're going to use it again later. Thanks!

lovely!

Date: 2004-06-14 10:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ixchelmala.livejournal.com
Yes, more please! That was beautiful! You could probably still incorporate it into the fic no?

Re: lovely!

Date: 2004-06-15 08:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! And no, I don't think this will appear in the fic. It's a significant enough thing that it would have to play a bigger role than I'm willing to give it. But I'm glad I could still put this scene up for people to see!

Date: 2004-06-14 11:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] killer-the-cat.livejournal.com
Yes definately thristing for more darling!

Date: 2004-06-15 09:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2004-06-14 11:47 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] oconel
I definetely do!

And if it involves Draco's ass tattoo, I'll be willing to read.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
*grins* What if it involves Harry's ass?

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From: [personal profile] oconel - Date: 2004-06-15 10:32 pm (UTC) - Expand

more!

Date: 2004-06-15 02:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ashice-roses.livejournal.com
yes, I'd love to see more! wonderful scene, just loved the dragon, and the trick! so cute. give me more! Takes me back to the wonderful days when you updated this beautiful fic every week, I love the feeling I get from reading it! *hugs* thank you for the lovely little tidbit!
-ash

Re: more!

Date: 2004-06-15 09:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Aw, thanks!

Re: more!

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Re: more!

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Date: 2004-06-15 02:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] slashprincess.livejournal.com
i would love to see more! That was so cute:)

Date: 2004-06-15 09:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! More coming.

Date: 2004-06-15 04:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dorrie6.livejournal.com
Want to see more of these?

YES.

omg.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:04 pm (UTC)

Date: 2004-06-15 04:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/
Want to see more of these?

yep!
:D

Date: 2004-06-15 09:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Yay! Got a couple more...

Date: 2004-06-15 05:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] serenitas.livejournal.com
Do you even need to ask?

Date: 2004-06-15 09:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
I guess I didn't. *grins* Still, the affirmation is good!

Date: 2004-06-15 05:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] angelofmercy.livejournal.com
Want to see more of these? Do you even have to ask?

That was so cute!

Date: 2004-06-15 09:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2004-06-15 05:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] golden-snitch12.livejournal.com
I love this...it's like watching the extras on a DVD. I like the thought of posting your deleted scenes. It definitely gives me something to look forward too again.

As much as I enjoyed this scene, I can understand why you cut it from the original story. It sort of took the interaction between them to a physical level a little too soon. You have very good instincts where your story is concerned.

Are we going to have to wait until next Tuesday for more?

Date: 2004-06-15 09:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! I kept them as I went along, thinking taht I might still work them in at some point, and then I had them left over at the end. Seems a waste not to post them at all!

*checks calendar* Hmmm. Today is Tuesday...

Date: 2004-06-15 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] papermulberry.livejournal.com
*hugs* Wonderful reminder why I love(d) this fic so much :) Especially Draco's remark at the ending, about having to look very careful. So cute!

Do post more of these, they are lovely!

love, Gwen

Date: 2004-06-15 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thank you!

:)

Date: 2004-06-15 06:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] luahoana.livejournal.com

I liked how you drew out revealing Manny's secret, so it's hard to say to what extent this scene would have influenced the story, but it's really cute, nevertheless.

More, more, more! :)

Re: :)

Date: 2004-06-15 09:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks so much! Yes, the whole Manny thing became more important as the story developed, it turned out. The hints got scaled back as a result!

Date: 2004-06-15 07:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jameschick.livejournal.com
Malfoy grinned. "It only moves for wizards, you know. It looks like a celtic knot, unless you look very hard."

*grins* That was great! I look forward to seeing what else didn't make the cut.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:14 pm (UTC)

Date: 2004-06-15 07:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] geoviki.livejournal.com
This is wonderful. I think it stands alone without the Manny inferences, since it also shows Harry's budding interest and awareness of Draco sexually. I love detail like this, plus more magic is always better in HP fic. Some I've read recently could be set with any characters in any book.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks so much! I felt like there wasn't enough magic in the first half of the fic. It's something I've been mulling over. Part of the difficulty, of course, is that they're mostly in the muggle world. There's also this theme of Harry becoming gradually more aware of everything around him, and the magic increases as does his awakening from the smothering spell.

BTW, I've finally managed to find time to start reading "1000 Beautiful Things", and I'm loving it! I'm totally sucked in! I'll send more substantial feedback when I finish it, but I just wanted to say that, for now!

Date: 2004-06-15 07:59 am (UTC)
From: [personal profile] cheshyre
Definitely like the posting of deleted scenes.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:19 pm (UTC)

Date: 2004-06-15 08:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cypress-vine.livejournal.com
Oh, I *love*.

I think I'm going to enjoy these deleted scenes. XD

Date: 2004-06-15 09:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2004-06-15 09:42 am (UTC)
viridescence: (wanna shag?-by leetje)
From: [personal profile] viridescence
This was so cute! I loved it! Especially the part with Harry cupping Draco's ass. Yes, please show us more of these deleted scenes.

Date: 2004-06-15 09:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Thanks! It was a cute little moment, but the timing for it wasn't quite right, I think. And then it never quite fit it later...

Date: 2004-06-15 10:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] astentatioux.livejournal.com
*stares at screen as she just read that Draco had a tattoo*

*Dies at the mental imagery of Harry's hand on Draco's ass*

*tries to hunt down Emma for deleting this scene in the first place*

Mira chica, you have to post what else you deleted!

You can definitely add this to the completed version of the fic. Oh yeah this will work and the Manny reference could be added, though it's not needed... BUT WE NEED TO HAVE THIS SCENE!!!!!

*ahem*

ya dije!

Astentatioux

Date: 2004-06-15 09:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
*grins*

Well, this is a bit that I don;t see getting used, to be honest. Actually, there are a couple of deleted scenes that I won't be posting here because they will be worked into the fic itself, or into the sequel. I just didn't want to dlete what seemed like a nice little moment, you know?

Thanks so much!

oh squee!!

Date: 2004-06-15 11:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreamer-9981.livejournal.com
I've meant for the LONGEST TIME to review Left My Heart, because it is now one of my favorite long H/D stories, but I haven't had a chance. Needless to say, I loved the little cookie. I think my favorite part about the story, aside from the integration of the Intelligence/Wizarding world and the picture of magic in the States was the interaction between Harry and Draco. This is just like all of those little scenes that made the story great!

By the way, I seem to recall you mentioning a sequel in the works for the summer-any chance this is going to be forthcoming anytime soon? No hurry, but I'd love to see where you're going with the plot.

Great job!

Re: oh squee!!

Date: 2004-06-15 09:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emmagrant01.livejournal.com
Oh, thanks so much! I apprecite any reviews, no matter when or how they come! ;-)

The sequel will probably not make an appearance until the fall. I want to rewrite this fic first, and I'll need to work out a lot of what's going to happen in the sequel before I start writing anything.
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